(revised 5/12/2008)


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Honeysuckle drapes fences,
perfuming spring.
Giddy wild magnolia trees
lift creamy blossoms
for God and random birds to see.
Blackberries lurk, wielding thorns,
pricked fingers the price of a cobbler.
County roads grid
black-dirt farm land,
stitches on a quilt --
here a patch of cattle,
there a patch of sweet potatoes.
More patches --  tall-tasseled corn,
low-growing strawberries, glossy quarter horses,
emerald-leaved soybeans,
precisely-spaced pecan trees.


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Flowing south, the Mobile River
spreads its fingers
spawning Tensaw, Apalache, Blakeley,
then webs of creeks -
Mudhole, Briar, Shipcanal,
Big Lizard, Maple Bayou.
Delta marshes harbor
pelicans, osprey,
‘gators, night herons,
kingfishers, secrets.
Two centuries ago
Creeks and settlers mixed their blood
then spilled it
on Fort Mims' barricaded ground
above the wetlands.
Two generations later
Blue fought Gray at Blakeley,
unaware Lee put down his sword
at Appomattox six hours before.
Commerce, bloodshed, pilgrims
emerge along the waterways.


1

Little cities dot the shore of Mobile Bay
and the white sand stretch of Gulf coast.
Rivers, Magnolia and Fish, wander inland
by communities sprung
from Germans, Swedes, Greeks,
Italians, pioneers from Iowa,
smitten Yankees coming back post-war.
Silverhill, Elberta, Magnolia Springs,
Josephine, Bon Secour
sustain vestiges of heritage
in libraries and churches.
Volunteers staff town museums
stocked with family heirlooms
and local artifacts.

Sausages, strawberries, crawfish,
shrimp, watermelon, mullet,
snapper, oysters, Silver Queen corn,
soft-shell crab - all honored somehow:
a day, a festival, a cook-off,
a contest (how far can you toss a mullet?)
Perdido's vineyard offers in its line
chardonnays and cabernets
and Baldwin County muscadine.
A family with Guernsey cows
on a dirt-road farm
makes natural cheeses in the European style
with southern Alabama names.
Second-generation candy-makers
in Point Clear pull taffy,
pour pralines, dip chocolate,
and put wicked pecans in divinity.
"Jubilee!" rings in the night
when crabs and flounder self-sacrifice
and crowd the Eastern Shore.

Posted by Vivian on May 7, 2008
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Vivian on whole page :

I was inspired to write this by the fragrance of honeysuckle on fences along Baldwin Cy 16 south of Magnolia Springs. It turned out more Chamber of Commercr than I intended.

May 7, 2008 4:09 pm
Alexis on paragraph 2:

i could get a full history/nature lesson reading your poems, vivian–i just love your work…in this stanza, particularly, the part about mixing blood, and then lee’s sword…you just have a way…

May 8, 2008 12:27 pm
Rob on whole page :

Vivian, I love the “Honeysuckle drapes fences…” section, but I wonder if it loses something coming on the heels of the patches catalog. I wonder how it would work as the opening or as a new stanza.

I also like the “emerald-leaved soybeans,” but wonder if the modification on that item stands out too much from the others in the list. Might you try adding similar modifiers to one or two other items in the list?

May 8, 2008 12:39 pm
Vivian :

I’ll rethink the structure of this first stanza — maybe the first half last and vice versa. I’m also going to consider deleting some items from the list and adding modifiers to those remaining. Thanks for your comments, Rob.

May 9, 2008 12:03 pm
Rob on paragraph 2:

I wonder if a stanza break at “Two centuries ago” might be effective as well, and a line break after “settlers”?

I also find myself wanting a brief comment at the end of this stanza. What is the point you are making about the repetition of bloodshed? Don’t go so far as explaining it, but you might nudge it a bit.

May 8, 2008 12:42 pm
Sue Walker on whole page :

Is crsscross the same as grid? What about condensing? raods grid farmland . . .
SBW

May 11, 2008 9:27 am
Sue Walker on paragraph 2:

Love the image of the river spreading its fingers and the names.
SBW

May 11, 2008 9:28 am
Sue Walker on paragraph 3:

Last two lines. Could you rewrite the sentence without the “are” verb? Museums volunteers (verb) family heirlooms.
SBW

May 11, 2008 9:30 am
Sue Walker on paragraph 4:

Super poem, Vivian.
SBW

May 11, 2008 9:31 am
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