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when we made god
                  vanish
          in a puff of logic
we blamed it all on nietzsche
                          or darwin
          i can't remember
but
        we didn't need god
                                            we had technology for that
so
     we started fighting wars over real
             important stuff
   assassinations
                      living space
      free trade
                         that's the biggie
                                                         we had to make the world
                safe for democracy
so
     we imposed it
                                on those who needed it
and
         of course
                            like always
      we did it in the name of god
he's always there when we need him

Posted by Rob on May 9, 2008
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Rob on whole page :

I took a poetry writing course my first semester in graduate school. I didn’t do very well, and it essentially caused me to quit writing for 8 or 9 years. This is the first poem that I wrote after that period of self-imposed silence.

I ran across it yesterday, and after the formatting conversation on the blog today, I thought it might be worth posting.

I’m not sure why it’s in the form it is in. I was lying in bed one night and it appeared to me, visually, in this arrangement and it just seems like an act of crass ingratitude to change it….

Also, the “puff of logic” line is from Douglas Adams.

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May 9, 2008 1:51 pm
Vivian on paragraph 1:

I like the paradoxical first and last lines. And the asymmetrical formatting works well with the satirical tone.

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May 10, 2008 9:07 am
Rini on paragraph 1:

I think Vivian’s comment is “spot on” as the Brits might say. This is a very good social comment that doesn’t need to rant; it just is what it is. An entire global awareness course could be made from this.

Rini

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June 30, 2008 5:13 pm
sue walker on paragraph 1:

Rob,
This is one of my favorite poems of yours.

One small nit-picky thing. I’m biased against “always” because few things are “always” — like we’re not always kind and gentle, etc. I like the poem — think it’s stronger as:

of course
we did it in the name of god

Whatcha think?
SBW

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July 1, 2008 7:45 pm
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