She pays lip service to God
and head service to her man.
I don't want to judge,
but it's inherent in opinion.
I don't want to judge,
for that would remind me
that I am the least of these
and the same as them.
For where they give their time
to their hands and lips,
I give my time to my eyes
What does God get?
Posted by Nathan on June 8, 2008
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That judging is “inherent in opinion” is such an astute observation. It’s really true, isn’t it? When someone begins a sentence with “It’s just my opinion, but…” you know what’s coming…
“I am the least of these / and the same as them.” is a neat combination of Biblical and more common language, I think, but in this last stanza, I wonder if “For” is a little extra at the beginning of that first line? I don’t like the idea of beginning it with “where” either. In fact, why not just “They give their time” on that first line? It would make the first and third lines more parallel, too. I do really like the rhythm in the last three lines; it ends the poem well.
Repeating “I don’t want to judge” is very effective here because clearly the judging is happening. Love the title.
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