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Amputated, Amateur, Actor

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I can't stand on my own two feet.
Greater love has no man
than that he should lay down
his life for his friends.
What about a man who would
cut off his leg?
How is he supposed to stand?

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Doctors
aren't allowed to treat themselves.
Dentists
don't pull their own teeth.
Psychiatrists
don't evaluate themselves.
I can't go on without a sounding board.


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I want my leg back.
I try to hold on to her
but she doesn't hold back.
After all the times I've played
doctor, psychologist, pastor,
no one will play for me.
I want my leg back.

Posted by Nathan on June 10, 2008
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SBW on whole page :

Nathan, so you too are attached to missing legs. I like your poem, but I don’t think you need the quote — unless you set it off at the beginning of the poem.

I think the most dramatic beginning is: “What about a man who would cut off his leg?” Actually this makes me think of that guy who was in the Rockies and had somehow been smashed between rocks or something — and the only way he could extricate himself was to cut off his own leg — which he did!

Anyway, try shifting the “I can’t stand on my own to feet” to the end of stanza one — and delete the last line. Just a thought.

I’m enjoying your poems.

SBW

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June 10, 2008 5:39 pm
Vivian on paragraph 4:

This is my favorite stanza. I like the repetition of the first line at the end. The double meaning in “but she doesn’t hold back” is good.

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June 12, 2008 8:54 am
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