This poem is the result of a free-writing session in a wonderful workshop attended by Dr. Walker, P.T. Paul, and me. We had a wonderful speaker, Priscilla Hancock Cooper, who talked to us about her experience teaching poetry writing to youth in some of Alabama's juvenile detention facilities. If any one has the chance to hear her speak or teach a workshop, I'd definitely recommend taking it. The poem itself doesn't have a title yet, but I welcome any suggestions.


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Blown glass bubbles, bursts, and burns
orange, amber, white, and blue.
A furnace of heat unshapes it, liquefies
a lava that when melting
drips solid pearls upon the floor,
silicon beads that hiss their way down
through frigid air and ping
across the concrete, rolling, singing,
glistening. Spherical music
drowned out by fire and the heat
of concentration, finds a corner,
slows and stops,
a diamond waiting patiently in the dust
for sweeping or an eye that sees
the brilliance of the accident.

Posted by Meagan M. on June 29, 2008
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alexis on whole page :

i really like this–especially the word “ping,” and all of your vivid imagery, the rolling of the beads of glass–i can picture them as if they were scattered before me…i love the last 3 lines and think your title is in there somewhere. i have written them down on a piece of paper, tinkering, looking for a title–not trying to be presumptuous as your work is always so wonderful…i wonder if the diamond could be waiting ‘patiently’ or ‘nervously’ for a sweep either from a broom or the sweep of an eye/glance…the former being more devastating for this diamond peering out from the dust, waiting. either way, i think your title is in there–possibly using the word brilliance or some variation; maybe using the word “waiting” . sorry if this isn’t helpful, but i just wanted to comment on your work–it’s always so wonderfully descriptive and joy to read…

June 29, 2008 4:04 pm
Meagan M. :

Thank you, Alexis, for giving me my title! Sorry it took so long to implement it, but I loved your idea. I really appreciate your comment and your taking the time to tinker for me!

July 18, 2008 7:28 pm
sue walker on whole page :

Love this poem — but I don’t think that the title does anything for the poem — because it just names what we did — that’s not important.

I like the repetition of b: “Blown, bubbles, bursts, burns, and blue.”

I like “unshapes” as a word in line 3.

Love the sound coming in as well: hiss and ping — and the rhyming of ping, sing, glistening.

super: “the brilliance of the accident.”

Find poem, meagan.

SBW

July 1, 2008 8:14 pm
Nathan on paragraph 2:

I like this poem a lot. Unshapes is great. You always use words creatively.

July 18, 2008 2:18 pm
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