his name was tartt
he was from our hometown
but i didn't know him there
i only knew him at the lake
his parents' cabin was near ours
and the fact that he was
hardly ever there
only added to his legend

he was older than we were
i'm sure he was a popular guy
in high school and to us
he was a hero almost a god
a face chiseled from sylacauga marble
tanned by the sands of time
and framed by a pseudo-fro
of black coffee curls
even his post-acne pockmarks
added a rugged manly charm
with all of this atop
a muscular body
that must have made all
the girls back home swoon

but we didn't care about any of that
his looks just made him
that much cooler to us
our version of the ideal man
what we wanted to become
but his skiing is what
made us idolize him

while we would drag along
behind an old green deck boat
like barney fife stumbling
awkwardly across sheets of ice
tartt danced elegantly
behind his flashy ski nautique
cutting a symmetrical slice of spray
as he slalomed back and forth
across the wake
a sublime manifestation
of human possibility
what we could aspire to
but never hope to reach


3

some years later
when drew reached his prime
he was by far the best skier in our crew
but he was never able to
surpass tartt's skiing ability
so even with the benefit that
death and time bring to one's legacy
like with mlk or obi-wan
he has also never surpassed tartt's legend

Posted by Rob on July 10, 2008
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Rob on whole page :

This is intended to be one of the poems in the first part of the verse novel about my brother, probably toward the end of the first part, which is focused on our childhood (the second part will be adolescence and the third about his illness).

July 10, 2008 9:23 pm
Alexis on paragraph 5:

i love this last stanza..heratbreaking, as i wanted a happy ending to that verse–as i get to know drew, i wanted his legacy to ‘win out’

July 11, 2008 1:33 pm
Rob on paragraph 5:

When I sent this out to my poetry distribution list, I was corrected that Drew never actually got to be as good as Tartt, so I’ve corrected that. (I honestly couldn’t remember and just arbitrarily chose. I’m not sure that it matters, but I kind of like the logic at the end now).

July 12, 2008 9:21 am
Vivian on whole page :

Novel? Memoir? Labelling it a novel kind of insulates you from the wrath or pride of your family/friends/characters and it frees you up to take liberties with Drew’s skiing ability versus Tartt’s. I kind of liked the original final stanza.

July 12, 2008 12:59 pm
SBW on whole page :

Rob, I like the opening — but I wonder if this book is — or isn’t going to have titles. I wonder if the first lines of the poems could serve as titles — because “his name was tartt” seems / feels / acts like a title in my mind.

I like the characterization.
SBW

July 13, 2008 5:22 pm
Rob on whole page :

Sue, right now I am leaning against titles, but we’ll just have to see…

July 13, 2008 6:56 pm
Nathan on paragraph 5:

I love the Obi-Wan reference. Nerds win.

July 18, 2008 2:21 pm
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