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i dreamt of you
this morning
your hair was white
and short
after years of trying to preserve the length
and lovely
you had washed
the vanity away
along with all the black dye
and years of
obsessive worry
your face was pale
freckled
you blamed it on the medicines
and dewy
your lips unpainted
never leave the house without lipstick
and a Chanel compact

and you were beautiful


1

we met in a restaurant
your favorite venue
we used to dine in the better New York restaurants
and
you never ate much
driving everyone mad
with your table switching
while the maitre de and i
nodded knowingly
but not disrespectfully
at each other
you were always entitled
and didn't know any other way
to be

you, with a stranger
i, with your brother
and i watched you
from across the way
until the time was right
i'd never seen you dressed in
white or cotton
without your gold jewels
and blood red nails
manicured to perfection
spared by the poisons
like your meticulously maintained
house of cards

i knelt next to your chair
your friend and brother in my periphery
you sat slack
comfortable
at ease and
unrecognizable


4

the phone rang
jolting me awake
missing you more than ever
despite the four decades between us
we were the best of friends
with little
and much
in common
and
i don't know if i will see you again.

Posted by Alexis on July 11, 2008
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Rob on paragraph 1:

I like the way you use italics for the subconscious thoughts that intrude on the narrative. I wish you would do more of that in the subsequent stanzas.

July 11, 2008 10:24 am
Rob on paragraph 4:

There is a part of me that appreciates the mystery of not knowing who this person is, but there is also a part that wants to know. I wonder if the title might give a hint. For some reason, even though I know it’s wrong, I want to suggest the title, “Hospital Roommate.”

July 11, 2008 10:26 am
Rob on whole page :

Alexis, I put a comment on the first paragraph and it didn’t show up because of the garbage Word code. I fixed it for you, though. I think the “Paste as text” button is the only way around that. It’s not hard to go in and add the italics after pasting.

July 11, 2008 10:28 am
Vivian on whole page :

I like this poem a lot, Alexis. The little details bring her alive … long, black hair; table switching in “better New York restaurants;” “blood red nails / manicured to perfection.” Do you think the title might be more effective if you named her? Either “for aunt katherine” or just “aunt katherine.”

July 12, 2008 1:11 pm
Vivian on paragraph 4:

You loved her, fully aware of her “house of cards” and despite having “little / and much in common.” Good poem.

July 12, 2008 1:15 pm
SBW on whole page :

I like how Aunt Helene becomes someone the reader knows. The poem makes me wish I could have been present at the restaurant.
SBW

July 13, 2008 5:16 pm
SBW on paragraph 2:

The line that ends in New York restaurants seems rather longer than the other lines — and attracts my attention for being so. Likewise the next to last line seems long as well. Maybe you could delete “just.”

The image of the red nails like blood is striking.
SBW

July 13, 2008 5:18 pm
SBW on paragraph 4:

What a powerful ending.
SBW

July 13, 2008 5:20 pm
Meagan M. on paragraph 4:

This poem really hit home for me, personally. I’m having a similar experience, having a beloved relative right in front of me whose gradually losing the qualities that defined her to me and that I loved about her. Thank you for writing this beautiful poem that says so much of what I was feeling. I love the idea of “the four decades between us” and the last line hold so much uncertainty and heartbreak. The inserted thoughts in italics are just wonderful, too–those little truths about a person or things a relative always said that stick with you forever.

July 14, 2008 8:57 pm
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