to a bunch of small-town
alabama boys the green monster
didn't refer to the leftfield wall
at fenway park or even to
some imaginary beast lurking
below the waves of lake martin
for us the green monster
was a stereo speaker
my dad had built in college
only it was mono
for there could be only one

it was about the size of
an old-fashioned cabinet tv
and was painted a shade of green
like pond scum in summer sun
like a wasabi dollop spread thin
and dried on a dinner plate
left by the sink overnight

it was a monophonic monstrosity
hooked up to an old
harmon kardon amplifier
turntable and tape deck
and was an important influence
in my musical maturation
it introduced me and miles around
to inflated sounds of early van halen
boston kansas zeppelin and styx

when our parents weren't around
we moved the green monster
onto the front porch and cranked it
only to three-quarters never more
which still rivaled any spinal tap eleven

we turned it on for tunes to ski by
or for when we'd go across the lake
to the menzies' over a mile away
only to have their parents make us
turn around and turn that damn thing down

drew loved to use it as his reveille
blasting out billy squire's the stroke
first thing in the morning to make
everyone in the cabin jump three feet
in the air awaking from a deep sleep
and praying not to wet their pants
as drew danced around the cabin
acting out the words while screaming
the chorus stroke me stroke me


4

but best of all was listening
to carry on wayward son
loud and clear floating just off the end
of the pier a foot beneath the water

Posted by Rob on July 31, 2008
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alexis on paragraph 7:

this is my favorite stanza, maybe without the “however.” i’m sorry to impose my thoughts, but why not the whole refrain of the song, even scattered throughout the stanza? maybe finish the poem with the words following “carry on my wayward son.” considering where your story is headed, i think the entire refrain of the song (below) is poignant and fitting:
Carry on my wayward son
There’ll be peace when you are done
Lay your weary head to rest
Don’t you cry no more

August 1, 2008 2:51 pm
Rob on paragraph 7:

I’m not sure about the ‘however’ either, but I want something to change the direction. What if I change it to “but best of all…”?

I also like your suggestion of using the whole stanza, but not here. I’ve been wondering what to do with this poem from a placement standpoint, and it might be nice to follow it either immediately or at least reasonably closely with a poem back in the hospital that would use the whole stanza.

I’ve also been thinking about writing some poems about the rock band I was in at the time. It was the first serious band I was in, and we started practicing right before I left for Oxford. And I psychologically protected myself during and after Drew’s illness by pouring a lot of myself into that. Carry On was one of our signature cover songs. So I could also make the reference to that sone even more substantial through both of those things.

August 1, 2008 3:09 pm
sue walker on paragraph 7:

Rob,
I don’t like “however” either. Darn adverb!
I’m not convinced however really changes direction. I think the direction is changed in the “carry on” — and I really really like the final two lines.
SBW

August 1, 2008 6:52 pm
Alexis on paragraph 7:

only since you asked, i don’t think you need the “but,” either…i like it without.

about the placement of lyrics, you could do that throughout the novel with all different songs from your band days…if you wanted it, my suggestion would be an echoing of wayward son from the pier–last stanza to look like this:

best of all was listening
to carry on my wayward son
loud and clear floating just off the end
of the pier a foot beneath the water
there’ll be peace when you are done
lay your weary head to rest
don’t you cry no more…
the last 3 lines as if you are hearing them under the water…maybe all song references italicized…?

August 2, 2008 9:43 am
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