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drew died on a tuesday
as evening fell
i didn't know what to feel
i wanted to cry
but struggled to find tears
i was numbed by expectation
dread and emptied hope
clouded by the ambivalence
of not knowing
whether to feel relief
for his release
from pain and despair
or to grieve for mine
my brother died at twilight
just before darkness set in

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twilight is a time
of intermingling light
and dark where beauty
resides however unwelcome
and though the victor
is predestined by the diurnal
it is an internecine drama
beyond the reach
of shakespeare's pen
or fellini's lens
it is a time
that opens perception
inviting us to see
not in spite of the darkness
but because of it


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a mockingbird behind me
impersonates the nightingale
and then the blackbird

which causes my mind to stumble
among tropes of emptiness and fear
and find itself alone

i look for god
in the pages of a book
and find comfort
in the longing of duino
and dover beach

Posted by Rob on August 7, 2008
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Rob on whole page :

The poem above the line is new, but as it was developing, I thought it would pair nicely with one of my favorite old poems.

August 7, 2008 10:15 pm
Vivian on paragraph 1:

The specifics of Tuesday and twilight lend strength. The last line is great.

August 8, 2008 8:33 am
Vivian on paragraph 3:

I like the concept of light and dark fighting for supremacy and the resolution of being able to “see / not in spite of the darkness / but because of it.” I wonder — is “intermingling” a strong enough verb for the conflict going on?

August 8, 2008 8:36 am
sue walker on paragraph 1:

I like the echoing last two lines that take the reader back to the beginning of the poem.
SBW

August 13, 2008 10:09 pm
sue walker on paragraph 3:

Rob,

I don’t know that “somehow,” especially adds to the poem. I think the line has to justify it’s own excuse for being. “Somehow” diminishes the quality of the rest of the poem for me.
SBW

August 13, 2008 10:11 pm
sue walker on paragraph 4:

Rob, I really like “Shakespeare’s pen” and Fellini’s lens.” And the last two lines of this stanza are terrific.
SBW

August 13, 2008 10:13 pm
sue walker on paragraph 4:

Great stanza. I like the shift to the birds–reminds me of Emily D shifting to the buzzing of a fly in the midst of death and dying.
SBW

August 13, 2008 10:15 pm
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