1

i know, i know
what they all say
that you and i
were simply going
to meet
in some fortuitous way
and as
time passes by
in unorganized days
while my unplanned existence
keeps you at bay
there's an increasing chance
that we'll never do
what they all say
and
it will all
all of it
it has to be...
okay.


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it is what it is
is what i like to say
when i think and
i hope
and
i laugh
and
i pray
that you know
as i do
that this was never
the way
i intended to pay
for whatever i did
on whatever day
always unknown to
me, you and they


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to involve you
or not
if you please,
if i may,
you should know
i should say
before you're too far away
it was not
is not
it will never be
none of it is...
okay.

Posted by Alexis on August 18, 2008
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Meagan M. on whole page :

I like the way the rhyme that ghosts through this poem lends to the reader’s expectation of the ending. Also, the line breaks do a great job of communicating the speaker’s uncertainty. I particularly like the group of lines in stanza two “i hope / and / i laugh / and / i pray.” It makes “and” work by itself on a line, I think. Also, “if you please, / if i may, / you should know / i should say” seems particularly packed with emotion. As for the title, I think I lean toward “to my accomplice” in preference. It seems to personalize the poem more.

August 23, 2008 8:30 pm
SBW on paragraph 1:

Alexis, in reading this over again, I’m not sure who “they” refers to — but maybe I’m just tired and my brains stogy tonight after finally completing a book review I agreed to write.

Do you need the next line in this stanza? Can’t you leave it up to the reader to know this?
SBW

August 24, 2008 7:29 pm
SBW on paragraph 2:

Again, I think that it’s hard not to say too much when the experience wants to tell more than words can really convey.

I’m not sure you need the last two lines in this stanza.
SBW

August 24, 2008 7:31 pm
SBW on paragraph 3:

Very good. You’ve nailed this last stanza.
SBW

August 24, 2008 7:32 pm
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